Bonjour, Pouvez vous corriger mon texte Svp voici la consigne se mettre dans la peau du garcon qui vit dans un workhouses (maison de travail) et qui est pauvre

Bonjour à toi :)))))))

J'espère que tu vas bien !

Réponse :

Today was a difficult day. First, I had to wake up at 6 am. , First, I had to wake up at 6 am. Then, I had to make my beds, pray, clean my shoes and shower from 6 am to 7 am.

In the morning, at 7am , I had to do gymnastics exercises.

Everyday I had to eat the same tasteless food day after day. I was fed up and I couldn't stand the food for breakfast, dinner and supper. And the worst is it was disgusting and lacking in flavour. For breakfast and dinner, I had to eat bread, cheese and broth (but it depended on what day it was) and for supper I ate meat or porridge (it's also depended on the day.). When I asked for more food I was surprised because I didn't know that I couldn't take more. After breakfast, I could play. The girls had more playtime ( or breaks - le mot '' recreations " n'est pas très utilisé en anglais ), whereas the boys only had one. From 11 am to 12 am, I had to do grammar, parsing and dictation. The boys did grammar or spelling whereas the girls had domestic employment. Later on, at 2 pm I had to write in the copy book. I couldn't learn to read and write but there was still education. But boys had more education than girls. In addition, girls had religious instruction whereas boys didn't. Moreover, girls had to knit while boys didn't. Finally, at 8 pm, I went to bed. Sometimes I went to school otherwise I would work in factory. When I went to school I had to wear uniforms and couldn't fight in the building. But my work in the factory was very dangerous and if I neglected my work, I couldn't have dinner and only bread for supper. I couldn't speak to my family otherwise I would be punished so I was disappointed with that. I was worried because I had to live and work in different places. I was nervous, confused and embarrased when I arrived for the first time. Seriously, I was so bored, I missed my family and I felt so lonely without them.

Explications :

- tu oublies l'adjectifs possessif fréquemment " my ".

- N'oublie de rester dans le meme temps. ( changement avec le présent et le prétérit )

- Évite les répétitions ( tasteless, and also, whereas, school )

J'ai alors changé certaines mots pour mieux accommoder tes phrases en fonction de la synthaxe anglaise

- Pour les mots au pluriel, tu n'es pas obligé de mettre ''the" à chaque fois.

simplement "boys and girls" peut se dire également.

- Évite également de mettre " and " en début de phrase.

Hey, voici ton devoir :

je t'ai corrigé ton texte.... :

Today was a difficult day, First, I had to wake up at 6 am. Then, I

Had to make beds, pray, clean shoes and wash from 6 am to 7 am.

In the morning, at 7 am, I had to do gymnastics exercises.

Every day I had to eat the same tasteless food day after day food.

For breakfast, dinner, and supper. I'm fed up, I couldn't stand this.

And the worst was it was disgusting and tasteless. For breakfast and dinner, I had to eat bread, cheese, and broth (but it depends on what day it was) and for supper, I ate meat or porridge (it also depends on the day.). And also when I asked for more food I was surprised because I didn't know that I couldn't take more. After breakfast, I can play. The girls had more recreations, whereas the boys had just one. From 11 am to 12 am I had to do grammar, parsing, and dictation. The boys did grammar or spelling whereas the girls had domestic employment. Later on, at 2 pm I had to write in the copybook. I couldn't learn to read and write but there was education. But the boys had more education than the girls. And also girls had religious instruction whereas boys didn't. And girls had to knit whereas boys didn't. Finally, at 8 pm, I retired to bed. Sometimes I went to school otherwise I work in a factory. When I went to school I had to wear uniforms and also I couldn't fight in school. But my work in the factory was very dangerous and if I neglected work, so I will don't have dinner, only bread for supper. I couldn't speak to my family otherwise I would be punished, so I was disappointed with that. And I was worried because I had to live and work in different places. I was nervous, confused and embarrassed when I arrived for the first time. Seriously, I was so bored, I missed my family and I feel so lonely without my family.

Voilaaaa ;)