Hey, est ce que quelle qu'un pourrait corriger mon histoire que je dois faire en anglais ? Merci ! -------------------------------------------------------------
Question
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Éléments à intégré dans l’histoire: Sales were cancelled/ princess/ chihuahua/ witch/cave/bed/ they had many children
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introduction:
Once upon a time, a princess went to the sales but in town but they were cancelled it was a trick from the witch.
Triggering event:
Then as the sales were cancelled. Elsa went back home but suddenly Asuna appeared and asked her to accompany her and eating cakes. Elsa agreed because the witch looked nice.
First event:
when they arrived at the witch's house, it turns out that the witch's house was a cave, Asuna suddenly cast a spell on Elsa to turn Elsa into a Chihuahua! Because Asuna had lost her chihuahua.
Second event
suddenly a prince Harry appeared with a chihuahua of the witch. Then the witch canceled the spell, and Harry saw Elsa in a bed and he brought Elsa his home.
moral
They had many children
1 Réponse
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1. Réponse seliae1
Réponse :
Il était une fois une princesse qui devait vendre un lit en ville mais celui-ci avait été annulé en raison du mauvais temps.
Événement déclencheur:
les ventes ont été annulées: Elsa est rentrée chez elle mais une sorcière, Asuna, est apparue et lui a demandé de l'accompagner car elle avait un chihuahua malade. Elsa a accepté parce que c'était sa course préférée
Premier événement:
Quand ils sont arrivés chez la sorcière, il s'est avéré qu'elle vivait dans une grotte. Asuna capture la femme
Deuxième événement
Soudain, un prince nommé Harry la cherchait et la trouva, il menaça la sorcière de libérer Elsa. Après quelques semaines, Harry tomba follement amoureux d'Elsa. au bout d'un moment, ils font partie d'une maison où ils ont eu beaucoup d'enfants
moral
ne fais pas confiance à persone
en anglais:
Once upon a time there was a princess who had to sell a bed in town but it was canceled due to bad weather.
Trigger event:
the sales were canceled: Elsa returned home but a witch, Asuna, appeared and asked her to accompany her because she had a sick chihuahua. Elsa agreed because it was her favorite race
First event:
When they arrived at the witch's house, it turned out she was living in a cave. Asuna captures the woman
Second event
Suddenly, a prince named Harry was looking for her and found her, he threatened the witch to free Elsa. After a few weeks, Harry fell madly in love with Elsa. after a while they are part of a house where they have had many children
moral
do not trust persone